An extract of a story I'm hoping to write called The Voice in the Wind. Ben is looking for a present for his sibling Rachel's eighth birthday.
The little fluffy toy dog stood among three selves of fluffy dogs. Each was as identical as identical twins are; small pair of black and grown eyes with ginger straw coloured fur with black paws, noses and ears. Silver discs dangles from red collars flashing their identical names: Rover.
The little Rover stood on the middle shelf with the middle sized brothers with the smaller (and cheaper) brothers on the lower shelf below and the larger (and more expensive) brothers on the upper shelf above. He has stood no just on the same shelf, but on the same shelf for the past week, the last of the order he was list before the re-orders were sent.
Straw haired and sea green eyed Benjamin Patrick step by step passed every book and toy shelf over and over in his late teen head the same question:
"What would Rachel love to have for her eighth birthday?"
Ben didn't bring his younger half-sister with him or he wouldn't get her out of the toy store. He wished that he could remember when he was eight for ideas for what he could get for Rachel. It was here that he spotted the Rover puppies.
He stopped and looked at the three selves, turning left and right and tilting up and down. The little Rover seemed to catch Ben's eye for Rover seemed to have a sense of longing for love. The price was the full range of Ben's budget after getting a birthday card and some Irish music. Gently Ben took hold of little Rover and headed for the till and paid the bill. A bag was provided for.
"Rachel is going to love playing with you." Ben smiled to the little fluffy dog as he placed it into the shop bag beside the card and CD. "She will love you."
As Ben walked out of the shop door, the tune of "A Doggie in the Window" could be heard.
I'm to expand on this. I look forward to the comments.
it is very descriptive Christopher, watch the spelling though you have a few mistakes
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